英语老师帮我改作文


假如你是李华,你的一个笔友Alice,将要来你市参观游玩。本来你答应要去机场接她的,但是由于某些原因,你不能按时去接机。为此,你给她发一封e-mial,内容包括:
1)向她道歉,说明原因(老师安排英语测试);
2)提出解决办法(叫她在旅客休息室等你);
3)你们是第一次见面,告诉她然后认出你来(你身穿白色T恤,手拿两个红色气球)。
注意:1)词数:100字左右;
2)邮件开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总数。
3)参考词汇:旅客休息室arrival lounge
Dear alice,
i am eagerly looking forward to your vist to our city.____
_________________________籂尝焚妒莳德锋泉福沪__________________________________
______________________________________________sincerely yours,
__________________________________________________li hua

我的作文:
Dear alice,
i am eagerly looking forward to your vist to our city.i would like to meet you on time.but i am sorry that i have to do an english test which our english teacher made.so you will stay at the arrival lounge half an hour when you arrive.i will go there after half an hour you arrive. if you see a porson who dressed a whrite T-shirt with two red balloons,that must be me.and then,let's go to a meal.after meal,we are going to the cinema.
may your good time!
______________________________________________sincerely yours,
__________________________________________________li hua

请帮点评一下,打分,错误的地方指正,或者不够妥当的帮修改,谢谢!
问题补充:满分25分

do an english test改为take an english test;
made改为arranged;
arrival lounge后面加for;
half an hour you arriv籂尝焚妒莳德锋泉福沪e改为after my test;
dressed改为dresses;
balloons后面加in the hand(表示手里拿着气球,若不加,表示体恤衫上面画着气球);
go to后面加have;
meal改为that;
are going改为will go.

25分的话,这篇文章打16分。
looking forward to后应跟的是籂尝焚妒莳德锋泉福沪ing形式..
后面应该改为,,,looking forward to take you around my city.
不是用meet you ,应该用pick you up更为适合..
looking forward to 后面是应该ing
但是楼主后面接的是 your vist ,指的是一件事也就是一个名字了! 貌似正确的!
“porson” 这个单词写错了吧!person应该是这麽。。。写!
go for a meal 而不是go to a meal.
中间“so you will stay at the arrival lounge half an hour when you arrive.i will go there after half an hour you arrive. ”
改为"you'd better stay at the arrival lounge about half an hour until i pick you up at the airport."
注意单词的拼写,person,white.
1.which made by our English teacher 2.so you will have to stay at the arrival lounge half an hour after your arrival.3.I will arrive there half an hour later.4.with two balloons in hand 5.let's have a meal then.


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